Wednesday, September 5, 2012

Correction 1


ORIGINAL:

It is true that the growing tendency of advertising is all around us , and becoming an unavoidable part of everyone, the dilemma of whether it is positive for us or negative has already become an controversial issue in recent years. While advertising indeed has some benefits, there are also several drawbacks which are worth considering.

On the one hand, advertising will make contributions for booming the economy. In other words, it can be beneficial to marketing, among with the consumption is stimulated, becomes the most favorite way of promoting products. At the mean time, it also build up a feasible channel for consumers to purchase what they want, which is very crucial given the fast pace of life today.

On the other hand, it can not fail to take into account the negative impacts from advertising. Firstly, consumers may be mislead form fake advertisement, which means the products' performance can not be matched with what they promised. What is worse, consumers may get injured from unqualitied medical products, which may cause disastrous impacts. 

Secondly, advertisements will advocate consumerism and cause people to be extravagant. Especially, youngsters, who will be influenced easily from peer, they may purchase what tempts them without the insight of what they need actually. Taking China as an instance, with Apple becoming an icon culture globally, a large number of Chinese freshmen require their parents buy all Apple products before they go to college, which is not extremely necessary for their schooling.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that advertising can make benefits by bringing huge profit to businesses, while, it may hurts clients both physically and psychologically. Thus, I think the advantages of advertisements are overweigh than disadvantages.



CORRECTION:



It is true that the growing tendency of advertising is all around us , and is becoming an unavoidable part of everyone,. The dilemma of whether it is positive for us or negative has already become a controversial issue in recent years. While advertising indeed has some benefits, there are also several drawbacks which are worth considering.

On the one hand, advertising will make contributions for booming the economy. In other words, it can be beneficial to marketing, among with the consumption is stimulated, becomes the most favorite way of promoting products. In the mean time, it also builds up a feasible channel for consumers to purchase what they want, which is very crucial given the fast pace of life today.

On the other hand, we can not fail to take into account the negative impacts of advertising. Firstly, consumers may be mislead by fake advertisement, which means the products' performance cannot be matched with what they have promised. What is worse, consumers may get injured from poor quality medical products, which may cause disastrous impacts.

Secondly, advertisements will advocate consumerism and cause people to be extravagant. Especially, youngsters, who will be easily influenced from peers, may purchase what tempts them without the insight of what they need actually. Taking China as an instance, with Apple becoming an icon culture globally, a large number of Chinese freshmen require their parents buy all Apple products before they go to college, which is not extremely necessary for their schooling.

In conclusion, there is no doubt that advertising can be beneficial by bringing huge profit to businesses, while, it may hurts hurt clients both physically and psychologically. Thus, I think the advantages of advertisements are overweigh its/the disadvantages.

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